Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

THE RED LIGHT OF CONSENT

The modern-day floozy and bawd,
Isn’t working for your cheers nor applause.
Like a fractured mirror exposes her situation,
Whatever name she uses, false information.

Betty didn’t want to be a harlot or a floozy,
And her life is far removed from that movie.
A Pretty Woman before she turned to the trade,
Betty services men in order to get paid.

Her beautiful little dumplings start to sag,
And the customers want to pay less for a shag.
When they say the oldest profession does no harm,
With Betty’s history this raises the alarm.

Are sex workers only there to serve for pleasure?
Why did Madame Sin become a national treasure?
And how did we learn of her misfortune and her tales,
Salacious details, large print headlines, for paper sales.

If I could liberate exploited women,
I’d help them make a choice on their decision.
I’d start with teaching them with what they’re worth,
And prove they’re not defined by a fate of birth.

Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Betty's continued tale.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.

Comments

Watch this space! Our AI is thinking of a response. This typically takes up to 10 minutes.

Hey Bot, why aren't you commenting on my poems?

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

author comment

there is a glitch that should be taken care of soon. ~ Geezer.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

that the main thing I wanted to comment on, is that you could
pretty this up and make it sound smoother. You could do it by shortening many of the lines
and by leaving out some of the descriptive words to make the meter better, but I think that it would lose some of its
appeal and the story would suffer. So, I say that the scenery that is envisioned, the story that is told
is just right. Great job of asking the right questions. ~ Geez.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks Geezer, I can see what you're saying and I'll take another look later today. As it's a new venture/subject for me, I love the words you chose; scenery and envisioned. Thank you so much for your input, I have a few areas that I can work on now. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

author comment

A lot. This is such a great topic to write about as it doesn't seem talked about often. Many are quick to judge but don't really know their situation. Good job!

~RoseBlack~

Thank you Rose. I'm going to do a third one so it's a series but I want to let my thoughts stew before hand. Your comments, as always much appreciated. Take care Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.