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Dethroned

He thought I was his victim.
quite priceless.
When he figures out
I tricked him.

All mighty fear
heard I play nice
My response
Unpredictable
are you sure
You want to
Roll the dice?

A king imprisoned.
Such a sight who
would have
Envisioned.

His sword falls to the floor.
As he is dethroned
By the poet
That has fought
Too many times before

Happiness is ordained.
As smiles appear
On the faces
Of those detained
The king now a slave
Who would think?
The anxious poet
Is defiant and brave

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dethroned" presents an interesting concept of power dynamics and unexpected victories. The speaker's trickery and unpredictability add depth to the poem, making it thought-provoking and engaging. The use of imagery, such as the fallen sword and imprisoned king, effectively conveys the shift in power. The final lines, where the previously anxious poet is now portrayed as brave, also offer a satisfying conclusion to the poem.

However, the poem would benefit from some line edits. For example, in the line "All mighty fear," "All" should be corrected to "Almighty." This correction will improve the flow of the poem and prevent any confusion for readers. Additionally, some stanzas could be condensed or expanded to balance the poem's rhythm.

Overall, "Dethroned" is a well-crafted piece that leaves readers pondering the unexpected ways power can shift. With a few minor edits, the poem could be even more impactful.

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The rhyming scheme is good and I enjoyed the flow of your poem.

I'd like to go deeper but I think I am reading more into your poem than you intended, which isn't a bad thing.

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Your presentation of visual imagery makes your reader to pay more attention to the poem hence it engages the sense of sight. ( King, sword and dice).
Well done job!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Hello, Paul,
Very interesting rhyme scheme. I can see the "All mighty" used as two words with a completely different meaning than "Almighty" as AI suggests. I am like Ruby, wanting to read more into this, but maybe that is not your intent. I can certainly think of a public person (or two) whom would be considered a "king" by themselves or others, and dethroned, but maybe this is a bit more personal. I've read and reread a few times - so much here that leaves me to wonder.
Thank you!
L

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