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Tales Of A Modern Day Beast

Born in the dead of night, beneath the shadows of a cold, wolf moon. Whelping, yelping; his cry was like no other. Translucent eyes engraved on snow-white skin. The last born of his kind, a curse that would eventually bind, his father held him high, upwards beneath the star-laden sky, while creatures stirred in immeasurable sleep. His mother cried.

In daylight, she would run; she would run to where the moon didn't rise. To where it couldn't touch, twist, or turn him into one of them. To where he could be a boy—the bouncing, beautiful baby boy that she had always dreamed of raising. Not a thing; a terrible, tyrannical, murderous thing like what had ravaged, raped, and rebuked her once it had its way.

Stalked, silenced, stolen, imprisoned, and enslaved! Countless episodes of copulation under talon and fang; dripping jaws that smirked at her pleas. Savage growls that forced her to her knees. Helpless, haggard, and hardened, she was nothing more than a pawn in a game of wild preservation.

And when the child was born, she was rejected, dejected, and alone. Thrown crumbs under lock and key, drinking soiled water; Sucked into a world where no one else could see. The time had come while the others slept; along the cavern walls she crept, until the baby started to wail! Pressing him close to her chest, she leaped, and down they went. To the river below,  she splashed, letting her little boy go. While she awaited her fate, the baby floated as if by magic through an invisible gate. And his mother cried.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
Another prose piece- an introduction to my Lycan series, A Tale Of A Modern Day Beast.
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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She is on my list of authors to check out. I am glad you enjoyed this. I know you are interested in the Lycan series and am so glad you liked this.

~RoseBlack~

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Sorry it took a bit for me to come around. It’s your style, it’s good. I’ve seen such improvement in your writing over the past 6 months or so and it’s astounding. Practice make close to perfect, perfect is delusion (wink).

Tim

I am enjoying this style. I always enjoyed creative writing and now I can combine it with poetry. I'm glad you like this. There are different facets to my writing so not everything will be quite as harsh. On to the next part....

~RoseBlack~

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harshness is evident, it is also a necessary evil here. In order to bring the desperation of the moment, these lines needed the unrestrained lash of fear and terror. No unnecessary murmuring of pretty language, just the hard reality of doing what needed to be done and then... the realization it was all for naught. Gripping! ~ Geez.
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So many elements tied in here...and in the end...the limitless and unconditional love of a mother for her child and doing what was best for the child even if it meant letting him go on without her. More to come in this tale...check out Broken Boy-Living Doll...my first attempt at prose...I'm curious as to your thoughts

~RoseBlack~

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your structure is your language usage, in keeps building the story into a world where the only valid thing is the mother's love for her child. this story chilled me to the bone! such savagery... I am amazed at your storytelling abilities, they sound like they would make great campfire tales!!!

*big hugs, Cat

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I'm sorry it took me so long to see this. Neo doesn't show me when my pieces have comments anymore. I can see comments on what I have remarked on but no notification when my works are commented on. I have always enjoyed creative writing and am now glad to incorporate it into poetry. My two favorite types of writing now work together. There will be more to come in each story. I have some regular poems that fit in and I don't want to change those but will definitely be adding and creating more prose in the near future.

~RoseBlack~

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Thanks Paul

~RoseBlack~

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