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"I am" (by: eddy styx)
A
FAT
round
lazy
brown.spider.sitting
sitting
SITTING
indolently on my web
patiently
weaving
A
sticky thread
of
Cotton~Candy~Words
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words:
this poem was written by my Male alter ego who writes on the darker side of life.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-03-20 10:08
Hi Eddy
Astounding imagery. Makes me think of Anansi stories. But knowing your style I’m thinking this is quite terrifyingly murderous in intention.
Great timing,
Tim
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-03-20 11:10
hey Tim!!!
it is nice to see you! thanks for the read, am I that transparent? lol!
*ever, eddy
*
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Jackweb
Mon, 2023-03-20 15:51
Wow!
Apt, yet, packed with great imagery. Indeed, poets are silent weavers in time of creativity.
Nice one!
.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-03-21 05:53
thankd much, O.
I appreciate your comment and you!
*ever, eddy
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RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-03-20 17:37
I really like this
Made me think of Kipling's "Just So Stories." I can see the brown spider just patiently weaving his/her web. Great imagery and use of language.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-03-21 05:55
dear Carrie,
thank you for telling me.
*ever, eddy
*
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