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Words

Submitted by Leslie on Thu, 2023-03-16 07:08

Reaching back
touching truths
from the darkness
left behind
and yet it seems
that I might need
more to relieve my mind
once again alone
I face a bitter trial
there's no one to cry out to
I can't just run and hide
to face the truth
is bitter
it leaves a trace of
ire
I take a breath
and count to ten
the anger soon subsides
resolving to make
a simpler choice
just leave those words
behind!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
in the past some have said that what I write is a little to rigid. I hope this sounds easier to read. I hope you enjoy this poem. Thanks to all who want to read it!
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Thu, 2023-03-16 09:25

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keeps writing and discovering new ways to connect with the reader. We adjust and readjust. What is the reason for writing, if not to connect with the reader? Yes, there are many poets who say; "I don't care if anyone gets it!" That's B.S. if one didn't care, we wouldn't publish. We would just keep notebooks full of stuff, and whenever we felt poetish, drag it out and read our wonderful thoughts. As long as there is one person out there, who gets us and lets us know... but we always want more!
We crave that praise and don't let anyone tell you different. The old sour grapes fable is as old as time. I happen to like this!
I think that your short and precise lines, are built for rhyme! Even as one reads this, you can hear the music of rhyme in the background! ~ Geezer.
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