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Final Handshake

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2023-03-10 01:29

A few sermons said
he couldn't have recorded

draped in military colors
and saluted
suddenly recalled was a soldier
wanted to get up
but was nailed

taken to the crematorium
slid into an incinerator
nearest kith and kin
his spouse
silently wept

God let's shake hands
so far I had kept him
now you take over
as you are of heaven
the only single owner

I'm awaiting your tenancy
until then will pray feverishly

Lord we all have come to thank
Yes we know
you only can see

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Path to eternity...
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Fri, 2023-03-10 10:12

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Hello, Lovedly,
This is extremely touching. Just beautiful.
Lav

lovedly

Fri, 2023-03-10 10:20

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Thank you Lav
This one has touched so many hearts

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-03-10 11:02

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from your usual. Maybe there is something you've been holding back?
~ Geez.
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lovedly

Fri, 2023-03-10 11:20

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On Medical advice after VIRAL VERTIGO my splst told me to avoid going to grief paces
Three days ago I just had to
COMPOSED this visual poem in my mind No tears at all
So I posted it now ....
Different yes AT 83 one has seen the whole world via different spectrum ....Perhaps.. this may just be a sample.Thanks for spotting it ...Dear friend Geez

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Obadiah Grey

Wed, 2024-02-21 11:58

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This was a touching piece by an interesting man,
hope you're well and thriving.

Obi.

Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-02-21 12:18

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Where are you darlin'? who posted this?

*many hugs, Cat

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-02-21 14:13

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Where did this come from?

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-02-21 15:21

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That our Lovedlly has passed on to brighter fields of poetry, songs and Love. Go with our love, and be free...

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-02-21 15:38

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you are right. A final goodbye? A man of mystery; I guess he had the last word after all. I'm gonna miss your egotistical butt!
~ Geez.
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