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Seren

little star
of the far southwest.
lunar child, sun kissed
and star blessed.
her iridescent smile
bespeaks the glory
of centuries to be
and of spirits passed.
her heart is
a blooming desert,
celebrating the cactus flower.
she is both sunrise and sunset
and best;
my sister of lifting veils...
little star,
please shine and smile for me?

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She is all of those things. If there was ever a doubt we are born of stars, I think she would put that to rest fairly quickly.

Tim

She is one of the best people I have ever known. but then, so are you!

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I’m thoroughly flattered.

Tim

;) hey Tim, we are all glad you are here!

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I'll second that with a ditto!!, you've become a part of our Neo family and I for one am glad you're with us.

Hugs Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

You have no idea how touched I am. Big rolly polly tears are falling down my face and I am honoured that you would write such a magical poem for me.

It has been a really tough night and to come home to this was the balm my broken heart needed.

I absolutely love it!!! ALL.

It's an honour thank you so much.

Love you always and you have all my respect what a magnificent human being you are Sis, Lilbit xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I am a toad compared to you. you are a light unto yourself and I love you dearly, I hope you know that. you are a shining example of a bit of heaven!

*love & hugs, your Cat

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Well the poem I am writing tells a very different story. Thank you so much for your kind words they are a balm as you know. I'm as flawed and broken as they come.

Love you very much Lilbit

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

when you are feeling flawed and broken, you must come to us, we love you and hope to bolster you up. and we are good listeners for when you are feeling blue...

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to one of our premier poets and friends. Wonderful sentiments from a beautiful person. ~ Geez.
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thank you for your kindness to me :) I am so glad you liked it. she is so beautiful, a shining soul! and so are you!
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From one beautiful poetic heart to another I pray for both of you to always be happy regards John :):):)

for reading and your lovely comment!

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Seren is absolutely all of these things. She is a valued member of the site as well as a wonderful friend. You captured her beautifully within this poem. Bravo!

~RoseBlack~

I like to write about my favorite people it feels like I am giving something back.

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then in front of Seren sis I'm a tad pole
o what a tribute
it surpasses all poetry
ever
posted on her
till this eve

thank you, you are most gracious

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KINDLY thankx

hear an outpouring of praise in this piece. Cat, you've made a very beautiful ode to your friend 'Seren'. Nicely written.
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~Jackweb

thank you so very much for noticing. she is a peach!

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