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Tomorrow Is Another Day (contest)

I see 'forever' in your eyes
we have come so far, together.
I never thought I could feel this way,
until there was you, coloring my skies.

you never loved before you met me
you thought romance to be sober and polite
in your wildest dreams you never thought
it could be a wild expedition in fantasy

sonorous, I woke you from staid sleep
imagine your surprise, being pursued.
I knocked you off your feet
no woman had ever before made you weep

worlds of discovery in your seeking hands
soul bared under your considering glance
taking us places we had never been
from deserts of glaring sun and shifting sands

you did not have to ask me twice to stay
I saw it in your eyes, those intense burning orbs
I see our future solidified, hand in hand together,
you are all of my tomorrows and tomorrow is another day.

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I am only going to say

Sigh. ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.

Perfection in words and love, that end line is a cracker.

Love always your Lilbit

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

he is up but he has not yet read it....he is making breakfast, lol! I'm so glad you liked it. I never tire of writing about "us" or him.

*love, your Cat

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The site is so full of love and admiration of each other's significant others! It is absolutely wonderful to see. Your relationship with your Steven is so great! I am so glad you have happiness!

~RoseBlack~

thank you! it was a damned miracle we found each other when we did! he is so special!!!

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I just had to say that! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

thanks Geez! I have to shout it!!!

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Just like me.

Tim

and we are all blessed. it is a good man who knows he has met his match and a smart woman who holds him!

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All I can say that you're both blessed. Hope this happiness to last forever.
Thank you for sharing this lovely
Best wishes dear on the contest.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

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i appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem!

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