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(Your Name Here) In Nothing Land
I'm a lonely person
who walks this world
in search of
something.
People say to grab
the world
with your finger tips
but all I feel is
nothing.
Nothing has become
me, nothing
will always
understand
While I go long on
this road to
nothing...
Nothing Land.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
Heather Perry
Thu, 2023-01-26 15:28
Thank you
Thank you
Heather Perry
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2023-01-26 06:36
Edits
I'm a lonely person
who walks this world
in search of
something.
People say to grab
the world
with your finger tips
but all I feel is
nothing.
Nothing has become
me, nothing
will always
understand
While I go long on
this road to
nothing...
Nothing Land.
We love your writing. Things can and will get better. I know the emptiness, and you’re never alone. Anyone here will pick you up and dust you off. You just let us know if you need a rescue.
Tim
Heather Perry
Thu, 2023-01-26 15:29
Thank you
Thank you for you comment Tim
Heather Perry
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2023-01-26 06:45
hello Heather,
I like Tim's edits.
*hugs, Cat
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