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The way of water

mirrored mountains gleam
ripples erase reflection
water moves away

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Edit:- I changesd the whole second line.
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Not Explicit Content

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Yet the imagery says so much...well done!

~RoseBlack~

Thank you I'm happy you liked it!!

Kind regards Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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You're right I've updated this one I actually only had the taps to begin with somehow the M capitalised itself somewhere along the lines.

Thanks for the heads up

Kind regards Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Hello, Seren,
This is peaceful and serene, yet has just the right touch of motion. Wonderful.
L

Thank you I am so glad you liked it. Haiku is something I dabble in from time to time

Kind regards Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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excellent haiku! very visual words.

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you I'm so happy you liked it.

Hugs & love always Jayne xxxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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is my count.

*Love, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Yep that's what I keep getting too!!!

Love Always Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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That's a lovely thing to say!! Thanks so much. I'm a blank slate until I put my headphones on. I always listen to instrumental music never songs with lyrics. I find that sometimes being a singer it can influence the process.

I am so happy that you like it

Hugs Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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5 7 5 oe 17 syllables May get it checked by an expert Seren

Maybe I am counting wrong but I counted it to be 5,7,5.

shrug hmmm anybody got time to check for me?

Thanks Lovely. I will make sure to get it checked by an expert

I'm nearly done with your poem lovely.

Love J xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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you know I can't count
never mind
if I could count then USA POETESS
who took pains at teaching me
SONNETRY
wouldn't have failed

May God bless her soul

Yeah I am anxious enough to know ...the whole truth ...worth ....as a neo poet
Thanks Seren sis

All good easy enough mistake to make.

Don't sweat it!!!

Love ya Sis

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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You got it!!!

I had an epiphany tonight. That second line bothered the heck out of me soooo. Here it is my brain has stopped itching now. Lol

Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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