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Strangers

a lion must roar
to remember he can
so necessary his anger
to the ends of man
like poetry in league with its pain
i hear god in the walls with the termites
i see grief who forgot why she came
i feel you in moments and forgive myself
when i remember you're not here
so as i sit folding the papers
that one day they'll burn
i plant the parts of you
that moved me most
in the minds of many and
make the smiles of strangers
remind me of you

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My favorite lines:

i plant the parts of you
that moved me most
in the minds of many and
make the smiles of strangers
remind me of you

Nice, with smooth flow of language.
.

"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

...but I would never have expected something so primary from you. It will be interesting to see how this transforms into the free verse I would expect from you.

Cheers.
Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

“I see grief who forgot why she came”

That is one outstanding line of poetry
Tim

I agree with JackWeb on his choice of favorite lines. it is good to see you posting more :)

*hugs, Cat

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