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THE ABUSE OF POWER
The vestiges of your exploitation
have left all of us fragmented
now the center cannot hold
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-01-22 07:28
Excellent
The vestiges of your exploitation
has (have) left all of us fragmented
now the center cannot hold
Verb conjugation in English is nightmarish. You’re an amazing writer.
Tim
Jackweb
Sun, 2023-01-22 08:06
Wow!
Great thanks for the eagle eye. Your critique has added value in my writing. Much appreciated esteemed poet.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-22 08:09
dear Onyinyechi,
this powerful short poem (only in word count) is packed with explosives! brilliant!
*hugs, Cat
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Jackweb
Sun, 2023-01-22 09:29
Yes!!!
Cat, i agree with you. You really nailed it. Much appreciated esteemed poetess!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Geezer
Sun, 2023-01-22 09:58
Good job...
in paraphrasing the adage, "A house divided against itself, cannot stand."
Nice! ~ Geez.
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Jackweb
Sun, 2023-01-22 10:35
Many
Thanks for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Jackweb
Sun, 2023-01-22 11:18
Excellent review!
Abundance of thanks and gratitude to you for your precious comments.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Jackweb
Sun, 2023-01-22 12:33
Truly ...
It is.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Lavender
Sun, 2023-01-22 14:13
The Abuse of Power
Hi, Jackweb,
You have stated it perfectly in language and feeling. So good, and true.
Lav
Jackweb
Sun, 2023-01-22 18:59
Thank
You so much for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb