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THE ABUSE OF POWER

The vestiges of your exploitation
have left all of us fragmented
now the center cannot hold

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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The vestiges of your exploitation
has (have) left all of us fragmented
now the center cannot hold

Verb conjugation in English is nightmarish. You’re an amazing writer.

Tim

Great thanks for the eagle eye. Your critique has added value in my writing. Much appreciated esteemed poet.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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this powerful short poem (only in word count) is packed with explosives! brilliant!

*hugs, Cat

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Cat, i agree with you. You really nailed it. Much appreciated esteemed poetess!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

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in paraphrasing the adage, "A house divided against itself, cannot stand."
Nice! ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Abundance of thanks and gratitude to you for your precious comments.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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It is.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Hi, Jackweb,
You have stated it perfectly in language and feeling. So good, and true.
Lav

You so much for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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