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BEAUTIFUL SOUL
Your taintless heart
your embodiment of
blessed qualities
stimulate your resplendent
glow of attraction
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
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Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-01-17 16:24
Awesome
Your taintless heart
your embodiment of
blessed qualities
stimulates your resplendent
glow of attraction
Change to stimulate. A quality stimulates. Qualities stimulate. A taintless heart stimulates but that’s the subject. Your embodiment of blessed qualities is an adverb clause of the verb stimulate as is your resplendent glow of attraction. English is weird with verbiage.
Excellent language usage otherwise,
Tim
Jackweb
Tue, 2023-01-17 17:23
Thanks
Very much for the eagle eye. Your suggestions are very good and accepted. Your tutoring is very impressive.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Geezer
Tue, 2023-01-17 19:17
Sounds like...
the girl for you! She glows like a beacon. Like a moth to the flame, get her number and name. Good, succinct, terse poetry, that gives the girl in question ten points! Good verse. ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb
Tue, 2023-01-17 20:21
Haha!
'Get her number and name'. Gee, you made me laugh here. Thanks for your understanding and beautiful comments in regards to the poem.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
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Jackweb
Wed, 2023-01-18 00:54
Thanks
So much for stopping by. I appreciate it.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Words.unwritten
Wed, 2023-01-18 07:12
Love this ...x
Love this ...x
Jackweb
Wed, 2023-01-18 11:10
Thanks
A bunch for stopping by.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
C. Wolff
Fri, 2023-01-20 11:15
Simply loved it!
Simply loved it!
Jackweb
Fri, 2023-01-20 11:18
Thanks
So much for stopping by.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
C. Wolff
Fri, 2023-01-20 11:23
np :)
np :)