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Strength
There are something's
in a person's life that will
show them how
strong they really
are.
What will your strength
say about you?
Will you be the
greatest there ever
was or will you be
weak and fall?
Believe in the strength
and the power that
is certainly within you
and you will flourish
greatly.
Your strength will never
stear you down the wrong path
nor will it the right
one.
But be true to yourself
and yourself will be true
to you.
Have trust in your
strength for your strength
will always be there cause it;s
yours.
If you lose trust and faith in
yourself then what
do you have to keep
you going?
Yes children can keep
you going but for how long?
For they soon will be great
men and women in a
blink of an eye and
leaving the house
then what do you have?
You only have you and possibly
a significant other. But as it is
foreseen we will all
parish and in the end it will
only be you.
So be strong for yourself
and yourself will be strong
for you.
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2023-01-14 04:56
Deep thinking
So. I think you’re on to something here. I see a handful of typos but other than that I like what you’ve got. The message is clear and to the point, there is no love without self love and that can only be found within. I certainly lost it for awhile and I wrote myself right back into it. I hope you have too.
Tim