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Avril Lavigne
Fire in the night,
Night in the water.
I can see.
And even if You could.
I could be with You
I dream about your face.
When I see the light.
I am
With You each together.
I can get through.
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Seren
Fri, 2023-01-13 13:46
Dear Jakub
I can see you're a fan she's a wonderful singer, and to do her honour I would play with this some I am happy to offer suggestions. My first suggestion would be to remove the spacing like this.
It takes away from the write and to me (and it maybe only me) its distracting.
Anyway, I am happy to offer a couple of other suggestions if you want.
Fire in the night,
Night in the water.
I can see.
And even if You could.
I could be with You
I dream about your face.
When I see the light.
I am
With You each together.
I can get through.
I really liked your tribute!
Sincerely Jayne-Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats