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A Miracle In Breath
I see a miracle everywhere I look
In every flower and every brook
I see it in every tree growing tall
I hear it in every bird as it calls
I feel it deep in every breath
I see it in every birth and death
It is miraculous every night; I survive
It is miraculous every day; I am alive
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Geezer
Sat, 2022-11-12 02:08
Yes...
I feel a miracle here. I am so glad that you have found somewhere to be, a place that values you. Keep writing, we will keep reading. ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Depressed 1
Sat, 2022-11-12 02:31
Thanks
Thanks Geezer
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Depressed 1
Sun, 2022-11-13 07:19
Thanks
Thanks Mark
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-11-12 13:38
Yes!
This was absolutely fantastic and I think my favorite piece by you to date. I love how your perspective has shifted in this write and you have found something positive in every day! So glad you found your home here on Neo!
~RoseBlack~
Depressed 1
Sun, 2022-11-13 07:21
Thanks
Thanks for reading and the nice comment. I appreciate being here.
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Race_9togo
Sat, 2022-11-12 16:47
Good stuff.
Only problem is the word 'calls' in L4
Perhaps something like "I hear it in every LONELY bird CALL" instead?
or maybe 'echoing' instead or 'lonely', or perhaps 'far off'? Something like that.
Respectfully, Race
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Depressed 1
Sun, 2022-11-13 07:22
Thanks
Thanks for the comment and input Race
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Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2022-11-14 04:58
I love this
This is great. I love the theme. You’re a tight rhymer so this one fits into your style well but it’s very up lifting. I understand the lens through which you’re writing here and it’s one of my favorite moods.
Excellent
Tim
Depressed 1
Mon, 2022-11-14 07:00
Thanks
Thanks Tim. I try my best.
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