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Resorption
Beside you I lie
And we melt into one
Float in dark velvet
Warm as the sun
Feeling so fetal
Encased in a womb
Breathing as one
In our safe sacred room
Sharing a moment
Or two with my “twin”
Absent your presence
I’ll wander again
Lost in myself
But discovered in you
Now one mind and body
The product of two
Style / type:
Structured: Western
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How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words:
I have a need for cuddles. Wife also has this need. It is religious in nature. We deify each other with reverent silence
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rula
Fri, 2022-11-11 14:12
Hello RA
Lost in myself
But discovered in you
Now one mind and body
The product of two
The closing few lines sums it all for me
Well penned!
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Geezer
Fri, 2022-11-11 17:24
You make...
me feel warm and cuddly! I have this sudden urge to go hug and kiss my wife! Unfortunately, she doesn't share my enthusiasm for that kind of thing when she is busy. I have to wait my turn. That's alright, I'm patient. Your title is okay, I get the meaning, but could wish for something a bit cuddlier! The mood is right, the theme is great, and I wouldn't wish for anything more. Nice write! ~ Geez.
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Lavender
Fri, 2022-11-11 19:34
Resorption
Hi, Tim,
Re-anything with a spouse is wonderful and this title and poem covers it all. Very nice.
L