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My Love, My Rotting Leaves (Part 2 round robin)

Rise! pale white crocus of spring
Eternal love that never dies
Mortician’s stitches, her limbs now stirring
My would be bride opens her eyes

No apparition or mirage
Neither psychoactive effects
Of ganja smoke or liquid ghosts
Could make my lover sit erect

She scans the scene with empty eyes
That come to rest upon my gaze
She smiles big and opens wide
Let me tell you what she says…

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Structured: Western
Last few words: 
Continuing the saga…
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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I will have my submission in a little while, tomorrow morning at the latest.

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Rise! pale white crocus of spring
Eternal love that never dies
Mortician’s stitches, her limbs now stirring
My would be bride opens her eyes

No apparition or mirage
Neither psychoactive effects
Of ganja smoke or liquid ghosts
Could make my lover sit erect

She scans the scene with empty eyes
That come to rest upon my gaze
She smiles big and opens wide
Let me tell you what she says…

You can fly
But most likely die
Depending upon
Just how high

Death be romantic
Me the white crocus of spring
But soon to wither
As summer's croaking frog does sing

Tadpoles swim
In a puddle by the river
Think of the road
It's a cold story told

~Mark~

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Am I finishing this?

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I got confused when people stopped posting their entries under my lead post in my comments section....is anyone missing from the line-up? I thought Mark was supposed to be last? oh, my head hurts...still sick with hard coughing spells.

*hugs, Cat

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I thought I was going after Gee and am now confused. I will copy and paste everyone's together when I get the computer at work and add mine for an ending.

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feel free to add an ending, Carrie.
Looking forward to it now ;)
If you put it all together maybe Geez could edit it and post a final version with all our names in the last few words?
Mark

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