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Sick Again...Part Deux

Submitted by RoseBlack on Tue, 2022-07-26 22:18

Picking my head up
From off my desk
Reaching for the bottle
A bitter pill to swallow
My memory's eraser
Found in different flavors
What will it be tonight
Saying no gets harder
Saying yes is a trigger
If only there was
A better answer
Favorite poison of mine

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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RoseBlack

Tue, 2022-07-26 22:47

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I look forward to your contribution. I think this challenge is quite fun.

~RoseBlack~

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-07-26 23:40

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the way that you capitalized each line and left no punctuation. It felt like each line was a statement unto itself! It made it feel even more powerful. Great stuff! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Wed, 2022-07-27 08:07

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I feel like punctuation interrupts the flow and other times it seems to bring something to the poem. Glad you enjoyed. This has been a fun challenge.

~RoseBlack~

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2022-07-27 06:51

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I enjoyed this very much. sometimes punctuation feels too heavy to Carry.

*hugs, Cat

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2022-07-27 08:07

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I agree.

~RoseBlack~

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