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Beauty is not in the eyes

BEAUTY IS NOT IN THE EYES
Man is not his maker, supposedly that was, the world would had glance its worst nightmare.
In the eyes, beauty is assumed but the heart does it all. It sees and witnesses the true beauty whiles the mind polished it with its inner purified affections.
I once heard, man is made in HIS maker’s image, in which purifications and unifications are truly guaranteed. Yet still, man had the courage to portraits me ugly.
The world could had says, our maker makes us in HIS heart not HIS image. The eyes deceived. In denial of our maker, nothing holds that blame than the eyes.
The blinds can’t see but glimpse beauty, what more powerful in our mist than the heart? Beauty stands in the absence of sight, in his absence the aftermath and menace are unpredictable.
We walk with the eyes, but the heart does the seeing. If man’s eyes can say opposite things, who am I to trade my trust for them. This reflects my thought that man resembles his eyes, no trust for none.
The heart is a wonderful venue, which shows and appreciate our maker’s delighted works, in that regard, man could had embraced the heart than any, if only HIS work is vividly appreciated. Beauty lies not but in our most cleanse mind.

Bockarie Abass Keifa Lukay

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Beauty says seen through the eyes,
but the heart does it all
it sees and the mind polishes it
It's the heart that makes the call

I've heard that man is made
in the image of his god
No man could match his beauty
in the making of his bod

Man's not above trying
to do what he thinks best
He'll fix the Lord's work
He just needs a day of rest

So let man think that his mind is
all the beauty of
What his eyes can see
not our god's eyes above

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just a little perspective and a bit of logic brought you to this appealing conclusion ;)

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I think the way Geezer suggested editing your poem is about what I'd suggest.

Did you mean to write this in a "prose poem" form?

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not seeing your poem was supposed to be free verse.~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Geezer, any suggestion as to where it should be classified?
Then need clarification about the 'challenges #'.
Thanks!

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in classifying it as free verse, I was wrong in trying to make it rhyme. I tend to think in rhyme and write in it most of the time.
Challenges are four titles that you are challenged to write about every month. You may pick any or all of them to write about
You must use the challenge as your title. If you choose to write about: My Mother, the title should appear this way.
"My Mother". if it is I Was Lost, then "I Was Lost". all challenge titles are to be written as the challenge suggests. I hope that clears it up for you. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I have now understood exactly what the challenge is about.

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Nice.
Thanks!

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