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AUTUMN IS REAL FUN
Autumn arrives again
trees wind stripped-nudity
gals dance about a pole
shed their clothes like lifeless leaves
they show all lay beneath skin
no fruits dangling
apples and bananas
no breasts
no busts
all cast
as autumn arrived today
oldies too walk about in autumn
like me and you
dance about in the park
semi nude no hat
if trees can show
can't they
all ask me
you can't simulate trees
many autumns all have seen
naked like multi colored autumn leaves
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2021-11-30 22:40
Shed...
not shred. Unless you are implying that the wind has ripped their clothes off! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Wed, 2021-12-01 12:05
Thanks typo
shed
will correct Gee
lovedly
Thu, 2021-12-09 21:25
shred was corrected
still no one read it LOL
LOVEDLY IS NOW OLD
Geezer
Fri, 2021-12-10 16:37
Shred was not...
corrected! Sometimes we just don't get read! I read it! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
scribbler
Fri, 2021-12-10 22:26
hi loved
comparing the shedding of leaves and clothes works well here.
lovedly
Sat, 2021-12-11 11:13
THANKS STAN
kindness for the read