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Santa

I wish that Santa was still real,
Grandma and Gramps would be here
and Dad and my sister Anne,
Pal too my beagle hound.
They all taught me what loving is.

I wish Santa was still real.
The trip to Grammy’s and Pa’s
was a thing to wait for each year.
The entire family there,
all nine uncles and aunts,
and my cousins.
A potpourri the result of love.

I wish Dad was still here.
He taught by showing.
We attended many shows:
Around the world in 80 days
My Fair Lady
And big band, lots of big band.

I wish Santa was real.
Anne and I would be hanging out
at Edwards beach with Kenny and Paulette,
All our friends there playing.
I miss my sister so much.

I wish Santa was real.
Loving Pal was my pleasure.
The crazy mutt would disappear,
and after a week would come home
smelling like skunk.
I was the only one kind enough to care for her.
I miss my Beagle.

I miss a lot from when Santa was real
-then someone told me he was not.

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Free verse
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Comments

That's more than three wishes so,,
the genie ain't gonna help ya, Mark.

I truly enjoyed reading this,
its well set out,
it took me, 'as the reader' to where you wanted me to be,
and, Its well written!

Nice one, Obi.

I think it still needs work like some punctuation and the enjambment in the proper case.
Later though.
See ya,
Mark
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The entire family there,
All nine uncles and aunts
And my cousins.

But you can hire a Santa for a while
pay him he'll smile
be ready for a pick a back
whole family can then join
for a Thanksgiving
and Santa will be back
safely with his family earthly
He will know where to go
next easily
Mark nice visionary ok visually
all of Neos will be happy
LOL will say our kingpin
GEE

It was quite a party.
Mark
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Plays a huge role in the holidays…. I like your reflections. Those take all of us to our own personal reflections of the missing things…

Would only suggest that even stanzas -all six liners or seven liners or five liners would make it easier for the reader to take meaning from it. The last few lines are really good… too…. Here’s what I would do with them…

I miss a lot.
That was when Santa was real,
then someone told me he was not.

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I don't think it could be more Free Form.
Later,
Mark
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Really enjoyed this one Mark. Took me back to my Christmas's past, and captured the fondness many of us share when we think of them. Well done!

Best

Michael Anthony

Thank you, Michael,
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