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AMAZED

Standing there, with the light all around you
I wonder.
seeing you with a smile on, looking back
makes me wonder more.

There are no rain clouds in the sky
the joy of that amazes me
moving towards your light
wondering why I would ever leave it.

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I met a gal....
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the musings of a man perplexed. "I was looking back to see, if you were looking back to see, if you were looking back at me?
I enjoyed the story and wonder if maybe you could find some other word than wonder?
1] The joy of that makes me [pleased]?
2] [asking why] would I ever leave it?

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I imagine the story is open to the readers interpretation, but as for me...
I was at peace, stepping out of this life and into the next... and it was Ok... everything was going to be ok.

Fantastic read !

For taking the time to read…. Perhaps wonder could be replaced, will think about that, and continue to edit…

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that you have the word you need right there in your title! ~ Geez.
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It has a spiritual feel.
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I had the opportunity to take some instruction from Carolyn Forche in a seminar I attended earlier this year. She maintains that one must allow the writing to get where the poem wants to go. meaningful to me, it was....

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