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I am borderline

I am a bottomless pit of needing,
A whirling torrent of over feeling,
The hellish hunger that goes unfed,
Pain and anger that never ebbs.
I am a vampire for your affection,
A martyr made from past rejection.

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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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What did you think of my title?
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I don't think this poem is finished but I wrote it the other day after one of my meltdowns
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Not Explicit Content

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I would consider this poem finished, there doesn't seem to be anymore to say. I like the use of the sound-alike [fed] and [ebb].
I get the meaning behind the title and unless it becomes a mode of life; I wouldn't be concerned about it. Be kind to yourself
and give yourself the same affection that you are asking from others. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

oh yeah!!! I really, really love this poem! it goes right down to the bone! you are an inspiration!!!

*hugs, Cat

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Thankyou im glad you enjoyed it

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