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Abundance

Giraffe.
Tower walking.
Exquisite designs intertwine.
Finds tenderness behind the thorns.
Grace.

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very good! I like the visions that accompany your lines and as I know some little bit about giraffes; I know that they use their long tongues to get at a favored, tender fruit hidden by thorns. The Tower walking is an obvious reference to their height and the exquisite designs pointing to their beauty! Surely no one can watch a giraffe walk or run without commenting on its' grace! Very well done! ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geez -- Giraffe is the favourite animal of one of my sons. We fed them on a trip to the Phoenix Zoo one time. Total thrill

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Oh and "intertwine" references how they cross and rub necks to show affection to each other.

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I did miss referencing that. ~ Geez.
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